The Business Academy Bexley Primary – suspense paragraph by Caitlin!

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This is a suspense paragraph by Caitlin. It is special as she really enjoyed writing it and she got into the mindset of the character.
Caitlin Suspense Paragraph

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  1. daviesjonny (United Kingdom) on said:

    What fabulous descriptions! You have built so much suspense! This is an incredible piece if writing, well done!

  2. IBurton (United Kingdom) on said:

    Wow you had me on the edge of my seat throughout! You have made great use of powerful verbs and adjectives. I liked the idea that your character kept a sense of mischief with the ‘mischievous twinkle in her eye.’

  3. moudhi (United Arab Emirates) on said:

    i love your story so much and your story is so lovly

  4. Swordfish (United Kingdom) on said:

    A wonderful piece of suspense writing. I particularly like the way the mood changes with a hint of mischief at the start to a more sinister end. It’s left me on the edge of my seat wondering what is in store.

  5. mrssmith87 (United Kingdom) on said:

    Caitlin – this is superb. I love the way you have used the short sharp sentences with repetition at the end. It filled me with tension. Well done you!

    Mrs Smith